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if someone like writting essay please help me. I just need someone to edit, and make it more long like about 5 sentences. Here is the essay i done so far…its only about 3 senteces with bad grammar.
Our project is to create a pamphlet for Humane Society. We all gathered around in Ms. Chapman’s class to do the research on animals so we could put it into our pamphlet. After we finished the pamphlet we all take turns to print out the paper and folded it. Reason we chose to do the pamphlet is because we wanted to tell the world that animals need our help. So by working together to help someone we felt really proud and felt like we just make a difference in the world.
i kind of fix it to make it better but its still the same Ugh.
for my essay i have to have all these:
-who involved
-what no-profit group
support back ground information about program and what you did.
-how did the group benefit?
-what did you learn about helping others?sorry if i’m keep asking for help on my hw, but this is not the only essay i have to do, i also have to videotape what i do for community service and stuff and i havent done any of it and its due tomorrow.
-thanks all-
I’ll do the grammar changes for you:
Our project is to create a pamphlet for Humane Society. We all gathered around in Ms. Chapman’s class to do the research on animals so we could put it into our pamphlet. After we finished the pamphlet we all took turns to print out the paper and fold it. The reason we chose to do the pamphlet is because we wanted to tell the world that animals need our help. So by working together to help someone we felt really proud and felt like we could all make a difference in the world.
Not too many changes needed, i’ve put what i’ve changed in bold.
The one other thing I would change is “the” “Humane Society. You may not have that organization in the UK….I thought you did though…anyway…it should have that article with it. 🙂
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